Feedback from the Writing Center!

 Writing center visit was a good chance to reflect my essay for Romeo and Juliet. Before I went to the writing center, I didn't have chance to listen other person's opinion and advice. Ms. Swift corrected some of my grammar errors and gave me an advice that my essay generally has too many sentences that are describing how I performed compared to analysis sentences. When I counted every line, quantity of performing sentences was three time more than analysis sentences. Therefore, I decided to add more analysis of original story such as what author really meant in each scenes that our group reinterpreted in the comedy and specific terms that represent author's purpose and has important role in the story. For instance, I added interpretation about the term 'sun'  in the balcony scene and how does the setting 'balcony' influence the scene. Romeo compares Juliet to the sun looking up from the beneath of Julie't balcony, like how people look up the sun. Fortunately, Ms.Swift's general assessment of my essay was pretty positive. She mentioned that the idea that converting Romeo and Juliet to comedy was clever and funny idea. Also, she said that I need to work on with connecting the analysis of Romeo and Juliet to my reinterpretation.
 Sometimes, only reading out my essay loud to other people helps revising by myself. When I was reading my essay to Ms. Swift, I could recognize and remove some unnecessary sentences that I didn't recognize before. Also, I could make sure about some words that I used but wasn't sure if that word is what I'm trying to express or not. For example, I used the word tomboy to express new characteristic of Juliet which is little bit wilder, more childish and louder than Juliet's real characteristic. I wasn't sure about the word because I've never heard or used it before I found out. However, by Ms. Swift's help, I could confirm some of uncertain words that I used first time.
 I knew the writing center from the beginning of the school, but I didn't visit frequently even though I knew that I'm a student who needs a lot of hep from the writing center. I was being lazy and wasn't confident enough to show my poor writing work to someone. However, through this helpful visit, I realized that I could develop my writing works more clear and stable by receiving help from the writing center and there is no reason to be shy to show my work to others. If I keep visit writing center and get feedback and advice for my future writing assignments, then I believe that my grade will jump up from B- to B+.